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Title: Brendan
Word Count: 267
Rating: PG
Original/Fandom: Original (Cliffton)
Your Character: Brendan
Pairings (if any): We don't need no stinkin' pairings!
Warnings (Non-Con/Dub-Con/etc): Not really?
Summary: Meet Brendan.

Brendan is only 18 years old, and already he's given up on his dream. Blackballed from the military due to his brother Kalen's terrorist acts, he's forced to find a new path. Though he's chosen to join Kalen and his friends on a quest to stop the war he once hoped to fight, he feels out of place among the rest of the group.

Not that Brendan's felt truly comfortable around Kalen in a long time. As children, they were close, but they've drifted apart. Kalen is smarter, good at everything, and better-liked at school. Brendan tries not to be jealous, but the fact that Kalen doesn't value the popularity Brendan wishes he had makes it even harder.

Regardless of his feelings, Brendan is loyal to a fault. When he catches Kalen sneaking out to meet anti-war subversives, Brendan keeps his secret without question. Even so, Kalen never shares his plans. Brendan knows Kalen's lack of trust is due to his temper. All his life, he's had moments where he's so consumed by rage he loses all control. Brendan has no doubt he could kill during one of these episodes. And Kalen knows it.

It's easy to see Brendan as a monster, a weapon. Inside, though, he's a caring person, willing to forgive almost any wrong. The anger that causes people to fear him isn't even his fault. Brendan doesn't know it yet, but he's the result of a failed genetic engineering experiment. Perhaps if he can find a way to control it, he'll be free to pursue a life of his own, out of Kalen's shadow.

Date: 2012-10-09 08:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] halfshellvenus.livejournal.com
I liked this, in part because we've seen most of this reflected already through the various parts of the story you've written.

I.e., you're "showing" all these characteristics as they're described here.

though, he's a caring person, willing to forgive almost any wrong.
That's something that's been implied, but I'd like to see more of. Brendan's loyalty is unexpected in someone with a temper like his, and it makes him more interesting and complete a character!

Date: 2012-10-09 09:40 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] n3m3sis43.livejournal.com
Uh oh. You haven't read Working It Out, have you? I think it's the last one before the 3000k one. Apparently I wrote a TON recently. Anyway, I wasn't really aware of the "forgiving" aspect of his personality as much until then. :)

Date: 2012-10-10 01:39 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alien-writings.livejournal.com
I know this character sketch wasn't your favorite assignment, but I enjoyed it. Lol, you know I like to read about Brendan though. :)

Brendan tries not to be jealous, but the fact that Kalen doesn't value the popularity Brendan wishes he had makes it even harder.

I know this feeling, of wanting something someone has and doesn't even seem to care that they have.

Date: 2012-10-11 01:57 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] n3m3sis43.livejournal.com
Thanks! I hope you enjoyed it because I might be putting off the rewrite of Visiting Hours until Fake!NaNo. It depends on how inspired I feel to write it sooner, but I'm pretty sure it might spark All The Drama because (a) I am going to write Brendan snapping and going into Rage Mode from his POV and (b) I'm pretty sure whatever happens in this story is the trigger for Devin and his later assholery/craziness/whatever. So I might wait to do the rewrite until I'm ready to explore whatever drama in the second half is still unwritten.

Awww. I bet it's a sucky feeling. Somehow I always end up being that asshole people are jealous of and I'm just like, "uh... me? why?" Either that or I'm totally ignored, which is actually sort of okay by me sometimes.

Date: 2012-10-11 02:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alien-writings.livejournal.com
I've been the asshole people are jealous of, too. It's a weird as fuck feeling because I'm like "you WANT my brain? WHY, dude? My brain sucks!" Generally speaking, I have major trouble accepting compliments, so any jealousy of me induces serious bafflement. Even something simple such as people going "I wish I could write/world-build/plot/etc. like you" makes me go "whaaa?"

And yeah, Visiting Hours Version 2.0 sounds like it will indeed spark All the Drama.

Date: 2012-10-10 10:43 pm (UTC)
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From: [identity profile] x-disturbed-x.livejournal.com
Oh, I really like this character. His relationship with his brother is especially interesting and heartbreaking. Despite everything though he's still loyal to his brother. Sometimes it's hard not to be when it comes to family.

How is it he’s a genetic engineering experiment? Nice for putting that in there, haha and I should really check out your verse now…

Date: 2012-10-11 02:01 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] n3m3sis43.livejournal.com
Awww, thank you. :D

He and his brother have a complicated relationship that I'm still exploring. His brother is a bit on the clueless side, so a lot of what Brendan sees as distrust is just Kalen being... well, Kalen. But there is a lot of uneasiness about his rage issues.

The genetic engineering is something I've touched on in my stories but still need to explain better. Basically, it's something that was done in secret and then abandoned and there are a lot of people walking around now who are children of the original subjects. Kalen and Brendan both have a lot of the traits introduced by the experiment.

And I would LOVE for you to read my stuff but just know the first 3 stories on the list and also the 5th one need epic rewrites. I wrote them during LJ Idol before I had any kind of real handle on the characters OR the plot and eh, it shows. :D


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