I can picture the conflict between Kalen and Brendan better now. Now I see it more like maybe Brendan started out being the good big brother trying to protect and help Kalen but then he realized Kalen got more attention from their father (attention he perhaps wanted) and that Kalen was completely unappreciative of what Brendan was doing for him. So then the anger builds. I can see it then fueling the soldier side of him to try and impress his father.
Some really good tidbits to work into the story. Revealing it slowly through flashbacks and their general attitude towards each other would be a good way to go. Then have it finally explode where they ave to deal with it.
A couple questions that popped into my head for background stuff: What does Kalen and Brendan's parents do for a living? Was their father a soldier or a techie or something else? Was their mom more loving? Was she abused in any way? Did she ever try to stop the favoritism and abuse on the boys? That could effect the storyline for them, too. Nothing that has to be shown in the book but things to consider.
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Date: 2013-03-14 12:39 am (UTC)Some really good tidbits to work into the story. Revealing it slowly through flashbacks and their general attitude towards each other would be a good way to go. Then have it finally explode where they ave to deal with it.
A couple questions that popped into my head for background stuff: What does Kalen and Brendan's parents do for a living? Was their father a soldier or a techie or something else? Was their mom more loving? Was she abused in any way? Did she ever try to stop the favoritism and abuse on the boys? That could effect the storyline for them, too. Nothing that has to be shown in the book but things to consider.