Yeah, you know I can't believe I didn't see it. Like, I like the symmetry of beginning and ending with Wes and Devin but as much as they took over my story, the book still isn't just about them. And it's more important for the reader to know the general setting and overall conflict first than it is for them to see what Wes and Devin did for a day.
Plus, switching the two chapters did give me the opportunity to create the amusing contrast (dramatic irony? not really but it is Kalen and the audience does become aware of said information before Kalen does?) between Kalen's perception of Wes and Devin as "insurgents" and the actual reality of their lives before Shit Gets Real.
And yay, thank you so much. I'm glad it works for you on the rewrite. :D
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Date: 2013-01-18 05:59 pm (UTC)Plus, switching the two chapters did give me the opportunity to create the amusing contrast (dramatic irony? not really but it is Kalen and the audience does become aware of said information before Kalen does?) between Kalen's perception of Wes and Devin as "insurgents" and the actual reality of their lives before Shit Gets Real.
And yay, thank you so much. I'm glad it works for you on the rewrite. :D