Awww, yay. Thanks for reading and feedbacking and stuff. :D
That's a good question. My original version of this story featured a totally different version of their announcement because it was a short piece for Idol and I was trying to be... satirical, I guess? I pretty much said the War started over a Coke vs. Pepsi type deal. The announcement in this version is different and would have a different effect. That's one thing I've noticed as I go through and rework all the chapters in order - the tone subtly changes and it affects everything after.
Have I mentioned how hard it is for me to write in order? It's worth it in this case, though. I'm all the way through chapter 8 now, but chapter 8's not posted yet because it might be getting combined with chapter 9.
Oh, yeah, back to what you said. That is such a good idea. My vision for them in book 2 is to be much more useful and competent as a team. I'm not sure that means people's reactions will not come up at all until then but it does mean they should come up then.
I did originally have an idea for Wes to find some other people who supposedly also wanted the war to end but turned out to screw them over in some way but I'm not sure that's happening anymore in this book unless I cut stuff. Hm, I'm kinda ehhhh on the plane-stealing mission (Beautiful Disaster) so maybe I should rewrite that one to involve the "other terrorists" who screw them over. Because Wes never fully loses his innocence but by the end of book 1, he's way less trusting. Thanks, Devin. :-p
Oh, look... I'm babbling again. You must have one of those (virtual) faces or something. Do people come up to you IRL and start telling you their life story?
The Robot Scrabble, hm. Some people seem to really like it but I think in general, showing my characters doing normal stuff is a weakness for me. I wanted something to show them being friends and doing something normal and if you do have other ideas for how to do it differently, I'm up for that. Thanks. :D
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Date: 2013-02-07 11:30 am (UTC)That's a good question. My original version of this story featured a totally different version of their announcement because it was a short piece for Idol and I was trying to be... satirical, I guess? I pretty much said the War started over a Coke vs. Pepsi type deal. The announcement in this version is different and would have a different effect. That's one thing I've noticed as I go through and rework all the chapters in order - the tone subtly changes and it affects everything after.
Have I mentioned how hard it is for me to write in order? It's worth it in this case, though. I'm all the way through chapter 8 now, but chapter 8's not posted yet because it might be getting combined with chapter 9.
Oh, yeah, back to what you said. That is such a good idea. My vision for them in book 2 is to be much more useful and competent as a team. I'm not sure that means people's reactions will not come up at all until then but it does mean they should come up then.
I did originally have an idea for Wes to find some other people who supposedly also wanted the war to end but turned out to screw them over in some way but I'm not sure that's happening anymore in this book unless I cut stuff. Hm, I'm kinda ehhhh on the plane-stealing mission (Beautiful Disaster) so maybe I should rewrite that one to involve the "other terrorists" who screw them over. Because Wes never fully loses his innocence but by the end of book 1, he's way less trusting. Thanks, Devin. :-p
Oh, look... I'm babbling again. You must have one of those (virtual) faces or something. Do people come up to you IRL and start telling you their life story?
The Robot Scrabble, hm. Some people seem to really like it but I think in general, showing my characters doing normal stuff is a weakness for me. I wanted something to show them being friends and doing something normal and if you do have other ideas for how to do it differently, I'm up for that. Thanks. :D