http://theun4givables.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] theun4givables.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] n3m3sis43 2013-02-07 01:43 pm (UTC)

I love this. I love Calla and I am impressed you managed to make me feel bad for Kalen. Originally I didn't, but in this version I definitely did. Poor baby is obviously lost and confused and doesn't even know where to start -- not that he even wants to try, at this point. I get Calla's frustration with him -- and in later parts it'll be very obvious that Kalen's just...not leadership material.

Also, Devin being all excited and very-Wes like is adorable. Obviously the two of them had fun on their little outing, but it's just really cool to see a happy and mostly-functioning Devin. It'll be fun to see how things go from here. :)

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