I agree with you. It needs to be explained they're insurgents in name only earlier. And more effectively. Kalen really doesn't get it because he's like 14 or so when first meets Devin and he's also just kind of clueless about people. And Devin is apparently passionate about the war. In a way that doesn't involve fighting and stuff. I'm thinking maybe this could be shown better by the scene I'm adding in chapter with them working on the bomb together?
Originally, this chapter came before the previous one. I needed to have removed all that explaining. How did I not see that? Thank you. Although I'm still not sure whether this one or the previous one should come first. The weapons expo thing is plot relevant. Ish. In that it is their first attempt at a mission.
I'm going to add a Kalen POV right after the bomb. I'm not sure about Wes. I wonder what I can add for him. Hm. Any ideas what you'd like to see from his POV early on?
Do you think I need to split up these chapters more so they're not so long? Ideally, how long do you want them to be?
Re: scene 3
Originally, this chapter came before the previous one. I needed to have removed all that explaining. How did I not see that? Thank you. Although I'm still not sure whether this one or the previous one should come first. The weapons expo thing is plot relevant. Ish. In that it is their first attempt at a mission.
I'm going to add a Kalen POV right after the bomb. I'm not sure about Wes. I wonder what I can add for him. Hm. Any ideas what you'd like to see from his POV early on?
Do you think I need to split up these chapters more so they're not so long? Ideally, how long do you want them to be?