Cut to Kalen just before he sets off the bomb? Mark this chapter as "present day" or something like that to make it clear we are no longer flashing back.
Show Kalen accidentally setting off the bomb and what happens after -- mass panic, troops trying to manage it, him and Calla getting away, explaining why he set off the bomb (he wasn't supposed to), Calla getting hurt as they run away. The two of them trying to decide what to do, wondering if anyone was hurt, etc. Kalen eventually deciding Calla needs medical attention and going to Wes and Devin for help. He doesn't have anywhere else to go.
Brendan at the recruiting office? Rage trance. Brendan coming out of it and being confused. Not believing Kalen is really dead. Resolving to go and look for him. Possibly stealing Kalen's robots (if that's a thing, which I should probably decide). Going to the hideout to see if Kalen is there or has left any clues to his whereabouts.
Wes opening the door when Kalen comes to ask him and Devin for help. Wes is excited at first but eventually has an "oh shit" moment. Trying to help Calla, which I'm pretty sure involves trying to go to the hideout with some sort of motorized device to carry Calla to safety (the RoboCart or something like it?). There are too many troops and they can't get back to her, so they go home and build robot "reinforcements".
Calla POV, a few days after Kalen's left her. She's in bad shape and probably isn't going to make it. Why isn't Kalen back? She's desperate enough to pray to gods that don't even exist on her side (in my rewrite, only Kalen's side has a god concept and she's fascinated by it). She decides she needs to drag herself out of the hideout and try to do... something? Probably not even clear to her what at this point -- she's all infected and stuff and just knows sitting there isn't helping.
Runs into Brendan and Kalen. They are fighting, probably with robots. Calla is hit by a stray laser and the next thing she knows, she's a robot too. She's fucking pissed. This is all Kalen's fault. The bomb wasn't even supposed to go off. And look, he and Brendan are brawling like savages -- maybe his people really are nothing but barbarians after all. This is so unfair.
Cut to heavily edited Brendan chapter of them all ending up at Wes and Devin's house and go from there.
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Timeline starting from the bomb again...
Date: 2013-03-26 10:35 am (UTC)Show Kalen accidentally setting off the bomb and what happens after -- mass panic, troops trying to manage it, him and Calla getting away, explaining why he set off the bomb (he wasn't supposed to), Calla getting hurt as they run away. The two of them trying to decide what to do, wondering if anyone was hurt, etc. Kalen eventually deciding Calla needs medical attention and going to Wes and Devin for help. He doesn't have anywhere else to go.
Brendan at the recruiting office? Rage trance. Brendan coming out of it and being confused. Not believing Kalen is really dead. Resolving to go and look for him. Possibly stealing Kalen's robots (if that's a thing, which I should probably decide). Going to the hideout to see if Kalen is there or has left any clues to his whereabouts.
Wes opening the door when Kalen comes to ask him and Devin for help. Wes is excited at first but eventually has an "oh shit" moment. Trying to help Calla, which I'm pretty sure involves trying to go to the hideout with some sort of motorized device to carry Calla to safety (the RoboCart or something like it?). There are too many troops and they can't get back to her, so they go home and build robot "reinforcements".
Calla POV, a few days after Kalen's left her. She's in bad shape and probably isn't going to make it. Why isn't Kalen back? She's desperate enough to pray to gods that don't even exist on her side (in my rewrite, only Kalen's side has a god concept and she's fascinated by it). She decides she needs to drag herself out of the hideout and try to do... something? Probably not even clear to her what at this point -- she's all infected and stuff and just knows sitting there isn't helping.
Runs into Brendan and Kalen. They are fighting, probably with robots. Calla is hit by a stray laser and the next thing she knows, she's a robot too. She's fucking pissed. This is all Kalen's fault. The bomb wasn't even supposed to go off. And look, he and Brendan are brawling like savages -- maybe his people really are nothing but barbarians after all. This is so unfair.
Cut to heavily edited Brendan chapter of them all ending up at Wes and Devin's house and go from there.