So this is me responding to your feedback a squillion years later because I'm trying to make some sort of sense out of all my beta/concrit stuff by putting the things I want to change into outline form.
And I'm sure you will totally care about this tiny detail right now, but I did figure out how to work in your suggestion about using creative descriptions of colors even in Calla's no-nonsense voice. She isn't flowery overall, but with her farm background she'd probably describe hair the color of (something related to corn or a grain crop?) or eyes the color of (the sky related to harvest time or something else related to their growing seasons?). So yeah. I know you're not in beta-mode and it took me a million years to kiiiinda figure out how to use this idea, but I get it now, so thanks. :)
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Re: Reading to the first set of **********
Date: 2013-03-16 10:50 am (UTC)And I'm sure you will totally care about this tiny detail right now, but I did figure out how to work in your suggestion about using creative descriptions of colors even in Calla's no-nonsense voice. She isn't flowery overall, but with her farm background she'd probably describe hair the color of (something related to corn or a grain crop?) or eyes the color of (the sky related to harvest time or something else related to their growing seasons?). So yeah. I know you're not in beta-mode and it took me a million years to kiiiinda figure out how to use this idea, but I get it now, so thanks. :)