It goes with his rage issues and I should have realized it sooner because he is the only one who gives me visuals. I mean, obviously this means they will have to be short and choppy because a person having a stress/PTSD flashback isn't going to go through some long cinematic -- it's going to be some scattered images or like thinking you're in a scene for a few seconds or so. So hm. But it actually makes something much later in the book work much better.
Maybe I will just save the kid!voice dialogue for his actual backstory chapter later in the book and just have him see some images (Kalen's bloody nose) and/or hear a few snatches of words.
Kalen and Wes both get POVs again right around when Devin gets his plot-relevant job. Which was going to be chapters 14 and 15 but will now be... a few chapters later? Kalen only has a few POVs in the book as it stands, but that may change. Wes has the fewest after him but is getting at least one more added besides the new one at the beginning.
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Re: scene 3
Date: 2013-03-25 10:47 pm (UTC)It goes with his rage issues and I should have realized it sooner because he is the only one who gives me visuals. I mean, obviously this means they will have to be short and choppy because a person having a stress/PTSD flashback isn't going to go through some long cinematic -- it's going to be some scattered images or like thinking you're in a scene for a few seconds or so. So hm. But it actually makes something much later in the book work much better.
Maybe I will just save the kid!voice dialogue for his actual backstory chapter later in the book and just have him see some images (Kalen's bloody nose) and/or hear a few snatches of words.
Kalen and Wes both get POVs again right around when Devin gets his plot-relevant job. Which was going to be chapters 14 and 15 but will now be... a few chapters later? Kalen only has a few POVs in the book as it stands, but that may change. Wes has the fewest after him but is getting at least one more added besides the new one at the beginning.