Yup, I intended to include the scene of Calla waking up to see them standing over her body and her being more mad and confused than anything else. Although in Brendan's chapter I do need to make him more obviously scared of her. But I want to keep that scene because it was really the only thing from chapter 4 I liked. :D
Do you have a preference for Wes before Devin or Devin before Wes? I could try to move things around timewise. Although now I'm sort of attached to Wes first for some reason.
Hm, good point about the fake bomb -- although the tech to make bombs small enough that they're not visible on his person might exist too. In which case I guess I would need to explain that.
Okay, I'm not obsessed with the POVs being even (although I prefer not to have two in a row for the same character, but I have done it anyway before) but what you are describing with that book you're reading sounds really annoying. And if it's in first person, POV switching in the same chapter is just wronggggg.
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Re: Timeline starting from the bomb again...
Date: 2013-03-26 09:14 pm (UTC)Do you have a preference for Wes before Devin or Devin before Wes? I could try to move things around timewise. Although now I'm sort of attached to Wes first for some reason.
Hm, good point about the fake bomb -- although the tech to make bombs small enough that they're not visible on his person might exist too. In which case I guess I would need to explain that.
Okay, I'm not obsessed with the POVs being even (although I prefer not to have two in a row for the same character, but I have done it anyway before) but what you are describing with that book you're reading sounds really annoying. And if it's in first person, POV switching in the same chapter is just wronggggg.