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The Voice in my Head
(inspired by Dr. Seuss's The Cat in the Hat)
The words would not flow.
It was too hard to write.
So I stared at the screen
all day long and all night.
I messaged Alicia.
We chatted a bit.
And I said, "How I wish
all my writing weren't shit!"
My muse was away
and would not come to call.
So I wasted my day.
I wrote nothing at all.
So all I could do was to
sit!
sit!
sit!
sit!
And I did not like it.
Not one little bit.
Then I said, "What the fuck?
I don't care if it sucks."
I typed,
then deleted and whined to my friend,
"It's tripe!"
And I heard it.
The voice in my head.
And it said to me,
"What kind of 'writer' are you?
Your plot's full of holes
and your humor's not funny.
And nobody
likes your main character, honey."
"I know some good ways I could help,"
said the voice.
"I have some good crit,"
said the voice in my head.
"A lot of good crit.
I will give it to you.
"Your 'readers' will thank me so much if I do."
Then suddenly I
did not know what to say.
My word count was already low
for the day.
But my friend said, "No! No!
Make that voice go away!
Tell that voice in your head
you do NOT want to play.
It should not be there.
It will make you morose.
It should not be there
With your deadline so close!"
"Now! Now! Have no fear.
Have no fear!" the voice pled.
"My crit is not bad,"
said the voice in my head.
"Why, this could be
quite a good piece," the voice said,
"with a technique I call
rip-rip-rip it to shreds!"
"Fucking Christ," said my friend.
"Let's not do this again!"
"Gotta go," said my friend,
and she signed off IM.
"Have no fear!" said the voice.
"I would not steer you wrong.
I will beta for you
I will make your piece strong.
By deleting this poo
and then writing instead--
good words," said the voice, said the voice
in my head.
"Look at this!
Look at your ghastly word choice.
And your info-dumps, oh--
and your character's voice!
He can't talk like this, dude!
He can't say 'fuck' this much!
Oh, the sentence fragments!
And your 'worldbuilding' sucks!
And look!
This is not realistic at all!
But that is not all!
Oh, no.
That is not all..."
"Listen up!
Listen up!
Listen up NOW!
It is good to use words
but you have to know how.
I can teach you to write
things that people will read!
Just as soon as you scrap
this ridiculous screed.
You must shitcan this 'plot'--
your 'protagonist,' too!
And then with my help
you can write something new.
You can write something great
if you do as I say!
But never your way.
Oh, no.
Never your way."
That is what the voice said...
So I sat on my bed.
I sat there like a lump
and I wanted to quit.
Then I said to the voice,
"Fuck you and all your 'crit'!"
So I took a long nap
and I thought and I thought.
I said, "Are you helping?
Oh, no! You are not.
You're not helping me grow
or write something worth shit.
No, you are not helping,
not one little bit!"
"Get out of my head!"
said myself to the voice.
"I have to write now!
Deadline's Monday--no choice!
You tore down my plot
and my characters too.
You wasted my time
and I wrote nothing new.
You SHOULD NOT be here,
mean old voice in my head."
So I banished that voice
and I wrote this instead.
(inspired by Dr. Seuss's The Cat in the Hat)
The words would not flow.
It was too hard to write.
So I stared at the screen
all day long and all night.
I messaged Alicia.
We chatted a bit.
And I said, "How I wish
all my writing weren't shit!"
My muse was away
and would not come to call.
So I wasted my day.
I wrote nothing at all.
So all I could do was to
sit!
sit!
sit!
sit!
And I did not like it.
Not one little bit.
Then I said, "What the fuck?
I don't care if it sucks."
I typed,
then deleted and whined to my friend,
"It's tripe!"
And I heard it.
The voice in my head.
And it said to me,
"What kind of 'writer' are you?
Your plot's full of holes
and your humor's not funny.
And nobody
likes your main character, honey."
"I know some good ways I could help,"
said the voice.
"I have some good crit,"
said the voice in my head.
"A lot of good crit.
I will give it to you.
"Your 'readers' will thank me so much if I do."
Then suddenly I
did not know what to say.
My word count was already low
for the day.
But my friend said, "No! No!
Make that voice go away!
Tell that voice in your head
you do NOT want to play.
It should not be there.
It will make you morose.
It should not be there
With your deadline so close!"
"Now! Now! Have no fear.
Have no fear!" the voice pled.
"My crit is not bad,"
said the voice in my head.
"Why, this could be
quite a good piece," the voice said,
"with a technique I call
rip-rip-rip it to shreds!"
"Fucking Christ," said my friend.
"Let's not do this again!"
"Gotta go," said my friend,
and she signed off IM.
"Have no fear!" said the voice.
"I would not steer you wrong.
I will beta for you
I will make your piece strong.
By deleting this poo
and then writing instead--
good words," said the voice, said the voice
in my head.
"Look at this!
Look at your ghastly word choice.
And your info-dumps, oh--
and your character's voice!
He can't talk like this, dude!
He can't say 'fuck' this much!
Oh, the sentence fragments!
And your 'worldbuilding' sucks!
And look!
This is not realistic at all!
But that is not all!
Oh, no.
That is not all..."
"Listen up!
Listen up!
Listen up NOW!
It is good to use words
but you have to know how.
I can teach you to write
things that people will read!
Just as soon as you scrap
this ridiculous screed.
You must shitcan this 'plot'--
your 'protagonist,' too!
And then with my help
you can write something new.
You can write something great
if you do as I say!
But never your way.
Oh, no.
Never your way."
That is what the voice said...
So I sat on my bed.
I sat there like a lump
and I wanted to quit.
Then I said to the voice,
"Fuck you and all your 'crit'!"
So I took a long nap
and I thought and I thought.
I said, "Are you helping?
Oh, no! You are not.
You're not helping me grow
or write something worth shit.
No, you are not helping,
not one little bit!"
"Get out of my head!"
said myself to the voice.
"I have to write now!
Deadline's Monday--no choice!
You tore down my plot
and my characters too.
You wasted my time
and I wrote nothing new.
You SHOULD NOT be here,
mean old voice in my head."
So I banished that voice
and I wrote this instead.
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Date: 2014-10-05 02:17 pm (UTC)Really I do!
I'm sure, in your head,
You think it's poo
But it's not
So you'll see
They'll like it too
If not, well then
I'll kill them for you...
;D <3
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Date: 2014-10-06 10:52 am (UTC)Glad you like it! <3
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Date: 2014-10-05 02:20 pm (UTC)Because really, this is amaze.
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Date: 2014-10-05 05:25 pm (UTC)This is wonderful, and so accurate!
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Date: 2014-10-06 10:58 am (UTC)And thank you! It was incredibly therapeutic to write.
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Date: 2014-10-05 07:13 pm (UTC)Love, love, love this!!
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Date: 2014-10-06 01:25 pm (UTC)This was really therapeutic to write. :D
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Date: 2014-10-06 01:26 pm (UTC)Thank you so much. I wasn't sure how well I'd do at a parody, but I really, really wanted to try it. It was very therapeutic and amusing to write. :)
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Date: 2014-10-06 01:27 am (UTC)no subject
Date: 2014-10-06 01:27 pm (UTC)I was worried about capturing the voice and the meter. I don't really do poetry (which this is somewhat close to), and depending on who you ask, I'm either good at voice or really, really bad at it. XD
My inner critic is very loud lately and it's a total asshole. It was really therapeutic to write this.
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Date: 2014-10-06 03:29 pm (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2014-10-07 12:11 am (UTC)"He can't talk like this, dude!
He can't say 'fuck' this much!
Oh, the sentence fragments!
And your 'worldbuilding' sucks!"
Haha, omg, my inner critic and yours must be drinking beers together or something. BASTARDS!!
I really like this, well done! :)
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Date: 2014-10-08 09:48 am (UTC)Thanks! I'm glad you liked it. :D
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Date: 2014-10-07 02:55 am (UTC)So, one of the gadgets I sell recently got the ability to do online downloads from a library very important to the blind community. When I had the beta software, and was preparing to demo it, I asked the product manager, "What book do you recommend downloading?" "The Cat In The Hat," said he, "it's a nice short download, and everyone knows it." LOL
This was fun, and I'm glad you defeated the inner voice of doom.
Dan
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Date: 2014-10-08 09:51 am (UTC)I guess everyone does know it, although I never realized how stinkin' LONG that book was until Max got old enough to still through the whole thing. When I was doing the parody, I realized it is 1620 words. And they say today's kids don't have attention spans. :)
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Date: 2014-10-07 10:15 am (UTC)Most surely I am
Your writing's not shit
It's like Green Eggs and Ham
When the voice in your head says
You suck! You should quit!
then just pay no attention
No, not one little bit
:D
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Date: 2014-10-08 09:51 am (UTC)no subject
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Date: 2014-10-08 09:52 am (UTC)I do know that version of the inner critic, too. Mine personally thinks it's fun to jump out at me while I'm trying to write so that I'm paralyzed and edit the same paragraph for like an hour.
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Date: 2014-10-09 12:28 am (UTC)I really enjoyed reading this, it was fun.
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Date: 2014-10-10 12:00 am (UTC)likes your main character, honey."
Hee-hee! You can still third-person him, or make him a background to another character. I vote third-person overall, because Brandon can't carry a story, Wes isn't strong enough, and Calla's robot POV might limit things a bit. But as part of the character soup, ALL of the characters are awesome!
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Date: 2014-10-14 11:06 pm (UTC)Third person. Um. Yeah. That would be the logical choice, wouldn't it?
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Date: 2014-10-10 12:24 am (UTC)Good work!
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Date: 2014-10-14 11:08 pm (UTC)(perhaps if Dr. Seuss had been born a few decades later?)